Comments on a gasping little voice: to top it off

Funny. Funny. Funny. I hate pineappled pizza. That...

2010-01-24T16:01:10.144-07:00

Funny. Funny. Funny. I hate pineappled pizza. That's not even pizza! I agree with a previous commenter in that the punctuation added to enlivening the voice, and what a voice in this piece! Maybe you were a bit quick to react with the fork, but I dunno...If you'd let him escape without making your drastic statement, he would just go and do that shtick with someone else.
This was top-notch.

hmmmm, stab in the eye for looking into your wired...

2010-01-17T04:32:31.815-07:00

hmmmm, stab in the eye for looking into your wired soul—obviously your soul is housed in your bosom—and not able to read your disdain of ham & pineapple pizza or get into the beer of pizza spirit but opting for wine—was the wine chilled?...I've kicked men to the curb for less...Get out off my life you wine swilling ham and pineapple pizza eating table rapping, chest watcher! Begone! Oh, and by the way, you might want to update your profile pic

Beer goes with pizza, sheesh what a nutjob. Great ...

2010-01-12T03:48:34.133-07:00

Beer goes with pizza, sheesh what a nutjob. Great tale, funny even. You were funny. O.O

Red wine with pizza? Not on this side of the Atla...

2010-01-08T23:45:46.911-07:00

Red wine with pizza? Not on this side of the Atlantic. I've had the "Hawaiian," before...I could go without again. The two things together? Definitely time to dump 'em.

Great details here. I don’t get why people like p...

2010-01-07T11:31:21.485-07:00

Great details here. I don’t get why people like pineapple and ham on a pizza. Don’t people realize what they’re sending out there when they state such a preference?

Wait for it... wait for it... BWAH HAH...

2010-01-07T07:19:00.476-07:00

Wait for it... wait for it...

BWAH HAH HAH HAHA HAHAHAHAHAHAH

From the tapping the microphone (I heard the tap!) to the last line, I was laughing. At first I thought it was going to be a reality show, but you brought it to an even funnier place.

AND THE VOICE! Pefect, Quin.

BTW, I also enjoyed how your punctuation in this brought it even more to life. I know, you (or others) may say that's silly to appreciate, but punctuation can take a story from words on the screen to a compelling voice and vivid picture inside the head. This one work--
listen... do you smell something?

hmmm, pineapple (yes, all my senses were involved in this one.) And the victim typing on the table when he talked--what a perfect detail!

ok, spicy sausage, bloody red sauce, and black sa...

2010-01-05T22:52:30.732-07:00

ok,
spicy sausage, bloody red sauce, and black salty olives, I'd take any day over pinapple it's too sweet. I married it anyway!

ha!

unforgivable lack of taste...

2010-01-05T20:17:11.836-07:00

unforgivable lack of taste...

Love it!

2010-01-05T12:15:34.254-07:00

Love it!